"January is the month to let go of fear and embrace transformation." - AI
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When the Poetry Sisters (Tanita, Laura, Mary Lee, Liz, Sara, Tricia, and Kelly) announced their January challenge, write a tan-ku, a tanka followed by a haiku, I paused because I was unaware of this poetic format. It was time to pick up the snow shovel and dig deep. I started by staring at my photos sharing winter's dazzling scenes of quietude. Then, I turned on the world news with updated reports on the world's sadness. So I picked up my computer mouse and began to compose a tan-ku. It was time to embrace a new format.
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This worked for me but I decided to concentrate on the mentor poem, Hubrus by Marko Kiakubo & Deborah P. Kolodji the Poetry Sister offered. My first poem did not look as terse as Kiakubo's and Kolodji's poem, so once again with a shovel in hand, I paused to create another poem.
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Winter Frame
Let's gather to honor "love as the poetry of the senses"!
(Honore de Balzac)
Carol, I like both of your tan-ku, and I like how you trimmed down the second one. I have heard that Japanese syllables are so much smaller than ours that it doesn't make sense to have so many English syllables in tanka, haiku, etc.
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